Cash money and electronic money are kinds of way to pay something , but the differ are from practice , safety , and economical. Cash money is money which is used to pay something directly , it’s easy to use. In the other hand electronic money is hard to use, because not at all of people know how to use it. Cash money is not safety , because when people bring much money every where, we will be afraid with thieves to steal our money. But electonic money is more safety when we want to buy something we just have to bring the card , and besides that the money is safe from the thieves. Then if we bring too much cash money, it will make us become extravagant, because we can easily to pay something that we want to buy, but if we use the electronic money we will become more economical. Since the safety economical factors are importanat to me. I think I choose to use the electrical money if I want to buy something .
Rahmita , 3 BA
rahmita, for suggestion.. you can use transition signals in your paragraph to make it in a logical order.
ReplyDeletethank you
"Cash money is money which is used....."
ReplyDeleteshould be "cash money is money which use" because "use" is a verb.
thank you ledy
ReplyDeletecan you show me the example
in my sentence
transition signal is first,second,third ,...conclusion .
ReplyDeleteThe differ are from.... ----> i think it should be "the differences are from...." because it's plural form..
ReplyDeleteIn the other hand electronic money is hard to use, because not at all of people know how to use it. I think you don't need to use "at".
but, totally.. your paragraph is interesting.. thank you..
I think you put mistakes in this sentence: 'we can easily to pay something that we want to buy,...'
ReplyDeleteIt should be ' we can easily pay something'
you don't have to put 'to' after auxiliary 'can'
thanks