Name : Rezka Aditia (3BIA)
Types of desserts : Baked Desserts, Fried Deserts, and Frozen Desserts.
Desserts consists of three types of how to make or cook it ; desserts that made by baked, desserts that made by fried, desserts that made by frozen. My favorite desserts is frozen desserts. I usually eat it when I have a lunch at restaurant. Frozen dessert is the generic name for desserts made by freezing liquids, semi-solids, and sometimes even solids. They may be based on flavored water (shave ice, sorbet, snow cones, etc) on fruit purées, on milk and cream (most ice cream), on custard (frozen custard and some ice creams), on mousse (semifredo), etc. In the UK and Ireland, where the term "dessert" is uncommon, frozen desserts are referred to as "ices". In some countries including Canada, the term is often used on products which are similar in taste and texture to ice cream, but which do not meet the legal definition of that term.
i think,,your topic sentence does not represent the whole paragraph :)
ReplyDeletei think your topic sentence is not appropriate with your paragraph. you write
ReplyDelete- "Desserts consists of three types of how to make or cook it ; desserts that made by baked, desserts that made by fried, desserts that made by frozen". But you only write about the frozen dessert. You have to write more about your classifying
Desserts consists of three types of how to make or cook it.
ReplyDeleteconsists should be consist. Because word 'dessert' is plural. And also 'it' should be 'them'.
i think your paragraph there is no conclusion, so the readers don't know the purpose of paragraph.
ReplyDeleteDear Rezka, I think you have some mistake in your paragraph such as :
ReplyDelete1. "My favorite desserts is frozen desserts."
(Desserts is ??) you should depend subject if your subject "desserts" you should use "are".
2. "Frozen dessert is the generic name for desserts (which is) made by freezing liquids, semi-solids, and sometimes even solids."