SHOULD WE HAVE A VOLUNTEER MILITARY
Name : Rika Agustiana
Class : 3BIA
ARGUING PARAGRAPH
We should not have a volunteer military. As a law country, we have law, and we should know about the law. If we have a volunteer military, undirectly, we support the war. And if we send our volunteer military to the country that have a war, we can be enemy for that country, too . In fact, after indonesia got their independent, indonesia does not have war with another country. So we do not need to have a volunteer country.
Posted 4 days ago by Rika Agustiana
you write this passage by using indonesian style.
ReplyDelete"As a law country, we have law, and we should know about the law. If we have a volunteer military"
second, better for you to write "implicitly" not "indirectly"
third,"we can be enemy for that country, too"
why "too" in the end of sentence? its Indonesian style which use English. better for you to write "and also"
Indonesia not indonesia
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