The Importance Of Regular Exercise
Swimming and jogging are important exercise regular to keep health. bud they differ in the time, performance to do and place. Swimming can do anytime whenever people want to do that, it can be in the morning because at that time is very good to people to get fresh air to keep their health. If people want to swim. The cloth like tank top or the other cloth which made from soft material, so that they can enjoy their activities in the water, but for jogging, they must not have special cloth which can make them suitable. People do swimming in the water, like swimming pool, beach, river, etc. If people unlike swimming or people can to swim, they can do jogging anywhere like in the park, yard, road or another suitable place whatever they like so that they can enjoy their jogging and relax themselves.
fety andriyani siregar 3BA
your sentence "If people want to swim"..
ReplyDeleteI think it's not a complete sentence fety.
thank you :)
dear fety, i have some comment in your paragraph:
ReplyDeletefirst, you have to put comma in your sentence if it is a conjunction. For example, this sentence is "..to keep health. bud they differ in the time, performance to do and place", you should put comma before "but" in your sentence.
second, your sentence is "..because at that time is very good to people to get fresh air to keep their health". It's better for you to write "..because at that time is very good for people to get fresh air in keeping their health".
It's only my opinion fety, thank you :)
Fety, I think this sentence:
ReplyDelete"Swimming and jogging are important exercise regular to keep health."
should be :
"Swimming and jogging are important regular exercises to keep our health."
thank you :)
Fetty, you should look at your sentence "Swimming can do anytime whenever people want to do that", it should be : "Swimming can do anytime and whenever people want to do that". I think you forgot to put "AND" as a conjunction of your sentence, thx
ReplyDeletePeople do swimming in the water, like swimming pool, beach, river, etc. If people unlike swimming or people can to swim, they can do jogging anywhere like in the park, yard, road or another suitable place whatever they like so that they can enjoy their jogging and relax themselves.
ReplyDeleteyou can write Some people usually swim on the swimming pool, beach, river, etc. then your next statement not support this sentence sista :)
fetty, in your sentence : because at that time is very good to people to...
ReplyDeletemy suggestion : because, it is a great time for people to..
thanks,
Fety, I think you have mistakes in this sentence : 'If people unlike swimming or people can to swim, they can do jogging anywhere like in the ...'
ReplyDeleteIt should be : 'if people don't like swimming or people can't swim...'
because the word 'unlike' is adjective, not a verb.
thanks