Monday, January 2, 2012

Classifying


Name   : Rian Tri Wahyudi
Class    : 3 BIA
NIM    : 0610 3090 1331


My Favorite Music


            Music is part of entertain for society especially teenagers because music can waste stress when we are hearing music. Music has many kind. Consists of rock, band, pop, dangdut, keroncong, etc. the teenagers delight music pop and band because music pop and band much tell about love which agree for teenagers like right now. Music is delighted by many people especially teenagers because music can give entertain.
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6 comments:

  1. Desti KurniatiJanuary 4, 2012 at 4:36 PM

    I think you describe just about Music not your favorite music :)

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  2. berti artikaJanuary 4, 2012 at 4:45 PM

    i think you should to write
    - "Music is part of entertainment"

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  3. Rexy TheradiatorspringJanuary 4, 2012 at 5:05 PM

    I think you should look at your sentence "Music has many kind", it's not clear for readers. You should write, "Music has many kind of Genres, those are : rock, pop, dangdut, keroncong, etc."

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  4. randy neldiansyahJanuary 4, 2012 at 5:12 PM

    many kind ---- many kinds

    Consists of rock, band, pop, bla bla bla...
    you should use subject when you want to make a sentence.....

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  5. LITTLE ARFJanuary 4, 2012 at 5:27 PM

    bro, your title doesn't represent the content of your paragraph. if you want to make a paragraph with that title (My Favorite Music), you have to describe one of the exact kind of music that you like the most. keep on practicing, bro.

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  6. RIANJanuary 30, 2012 at 8:41 PM

    thank you for your comment..

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