CLASSIFYING
I have three types of musics: music that I always listen is a easy
listening music, music can give a good mood and a new spirit. My favorit
music is pop. I like to listening music pop because music pop can make
me feel better when I'm not in a good mood. Example of pop music that I
like is Panah Asmara sung by Afgan, and when I want to makes myself
relax, I usually listening to music jazz, also listening to alternative
rock when I'm feel bored, it makes me fire.
name: biru liandana
class: 3BIA
dear,,
ReplyDeleteyou must focus on your topic sentence.
I think you've made a mistake with the sentence "I like to listening music", it should be I like to listen the music". thx
ReplyDeletetoo short..
ReplyDeleteyour topic sentence "I have three types of musics" but your paragraph not explain anything about your topic sentence.
ReplyDeletei think you tell us about the music that you like listen. But it's not about classifying the music
ReplyDeleteYou should stuck on your topic sentence biru, remember you have three types of music and you must explain them :)
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